Comments For Deceitful Start
theusagirl (Signed) on Mar 28, 2015 10:40 pm (Chapter 3)

*GASP* HOLY SHIZNET! That was pretty HOT, I agree this man could drive any girl crazy, I mean LOOK AT THE MAN! *swoons* Hmm..its up to you if you would write more though, its pretty good..but overall, I think for me, it should end here, it may leave more to the imagination for us readers... ;)

I also liked these lines here earlier:  

Chris rolled his window down and eyed J.C. suspiciously as he made his way back to the car, “You’re seriously going to leave?” Chris incredulously asked.

 “No, I’m staying, now stop smirking asshole.”J.C. said leaning down so he was eye level with Chris.

“I knew it!” Chris exclaimed his eyes lighting up with recognition.

I can hear Chris saying this! LOL 

Great job though...




theusagirl (Signed) on Mar 28, 2015 10:15 pm (Chapter 2)

When JC sang "Right Here Waiting" and played on the piano AND kissed her that was totally unexpected and kinda sweet... :)

I also love that Chris was like figuring which restaurant so they can go too..LOL

So far so good though..I'll read more soon... :) 




theusagirl (Signed) on Mar 23, 2015 09:19 pm (Chapter 1)

“SHE NEEDS TO MEET C!”Chris exclaimed almost jumping up out of his chair.

“What?”I asked confused looking back and forth between the three faces that were now all staring back at me grinning.

LOL I love Chris! :D Yeah she does need to meet him..I mean, I TOTALLY agree about the "lost in his eyes" thing...OMG! I wouldn't be able to concentrate..LOL

This is a good start..I'll read more soon.. :)




LadyX (Signed) on Mar 23, 2015 08:13 pm (Chapter 3)
I'd love to see it fleshed out  (hah, pun intended)and see why she is being deceitful and what happens when it's revealed.



LadyX (Signed) on Mar 23, 2015 05:43 pm (Chapter 2)
Oooh. Eating chocolate mousse off of his spoon and then him singing at the piano? Imma have what she's havin' ;)



LadyX (Signed) on Mar 23, 2015 05:29 pm (Chapter 1)

Cute!

That man can sing his heart out and pound the hell out of a piano...

Interesting start, I wonder how long Leah will be able to hide that she knows who they are and what kind of clash it may create.

 I like the title, it fits!






You must login (register) to comment.