Author's Response: See, this is why I love you. Shameless flattery will get you everywhere
Author's Response: Thanks honey - and no, I like it where it is. I'll leave subsequent events to your imagination ;o)
Author's Response: Thanks hon :o)
Author's Response: sorry, that was it!!
NNNNNNOOOOO!!!!!!!! you can't end here! i kind of like how everything didn't work out as was expected, since life doesn't work out as expected, planned, or hoped,but this effect would have gone over much better if the last part with the technician was left out. i say b/c now you're probably going to have a lot of dissatisfied readers who want more. maybe you should have an epilogue set like 20 years in the future where the technician has some terminal illness and confesses his guilt to emily...and then leave it there. i would probably still want more, but i would prefer that ending where i can decide that she did the right thing, since you've already laid the groundwork for that. suffice it to say i loved this story, just hanging on to hope that there's more.
Author's Response: That would be far too neat and tidy. Readers like neat and tidy, I notice, like to think the right thing's been done and some resoltuion's been reached but... life's not always like that, and that was the story I wanted to tell. If I gave you that ending, to my mind I'd have undermined everything I set out to do here. Of course, the beauty of writing and reading is that you don't have to agree with me on that :o)
Author's Response: *looks innocent*
Author's Response: Sorry, but this story's done cooking and is now out of the oven!! :o)
Author's Response: I'm sorry hon, but it's finished!!!
Author's Response: Sorry my love, but that's as much as you're getting!!
Author's Response: Oh but I can and I would, for I am evil *lol* Thanks hon!
This story is now marked as complete. Is that a mistake?
I like this story a lot and I like this chapter, but I really don't think you should end it here (if that truly is your intention) because I don't think an actual story has been told here yet. A series of events and underlying circumstances have been described, but the traditional elements of story - particularly the climax, the final resolution and the reactions to the final resolution - have yet to be told.
This chapter has done a good job at starting the uphill climb toward the climax, but to leave it on this note robs the reader of a full story experience. Again I want to STRESS that I DO really like this story, so I am in NO MEANS trying to offend anyone. However Hollie, if your initial intentions were to write a short story, I think you may have chosen the wrong storyline for that ... or at least you may have guided this last chapter in the wrong direction because I think you kind of created more loose ends with this chapter than you managed to tie up.
But seriously, I'm only saying this because I do like this storyline (especially where I think it can go; it's got GREAT potential) and I'd hate for it to end without closure for any of the characters and/or readers involved. ~N
Author's Response: Actually this review makes me happy, because what you're describing is exactly what I set out to do - a non traditional story with a format/structure that wasn't the old 'beginning, middle, end' and that didn't tie up everything neatly. Not everything does always tie up neatly and closure doesn't always happen, which is exactly what I wanted to put across. if I left you wanting for more then I really did my job so I'm a happy bunny :o) But please don't worry about me taking offence or feel like you can't make suggestions to me or put across some polite/constructive criticism. I appreciate the fact that you feel enough for the story to have these opinions and half the fun of posting stories is seeing what you guys think, so please always feel free because it can only help me out with future writing. I'm only going to take offence to people being rude, and you've been nothing but polite and intelligent so don't worry :o)
Author's Response: Well you're a rock star in mine, so that works out nicely :o)
call me naive, but it just amazes me at how many lies these people are telling! although i excuse trace b/c his lie was justifiable. and i can't stand how any woman can blame herself for when her husband cheats. i don't buy that whole "well, if i was just doing my job as a wife hewouldn't have gone elsewhere". BULL-FUCKING-SHIT. it's inexcusable period.
p.s.
justin's an ass. he may have good intentions, but the road to hell was paved with with good intentions.
Author's Response: Emily, bless her, is just still trying to blame someone who isn't Justin - Gabrielle wasn't working so she's moved onto herself
